Thursday, April 15, 2010

Fiction: Stranger


"You are in danger stranger out on the road tonight."

"Your car is not working and there is a storm fast approaching."

"Get in. Come with me. I’ll drop you some place safe and dry."

"So where are you from?"

"Why are you out on this stormy night?"

"You look like you have the weight of the world on your shoulders. "

"Things will get better. "

"Sunshine and blue skies are in the forecast tomorrow."

"What’s that you say? You want to turn here?"

"That is a mighty desolate looking road. So you live back here?"

"I guess you like your privacy."

" Pull over? But, there is nothing here?"

"Ok, I’m pulling over. Just don’t shoot me!"

"Ok, I’m getting out!"

"Please!"

" Don’t! "


Photo by Mary Moellenhoff

First published on azsky13.newsvine.com on October 18th 2007

6 Comments:

Blogger Kristin Callender said...

Hi Mary,
This is great. It shows how fast a situation can go bad. Sometimes, with the world the way it is, it just doesn't pay to be nice. Sad but true.

April 15, 2010 at 7:48 AM  
Blogger MB Moellenhoff said...

Thank you for reading it. I have picked up people under similar circumstances when I was younger. But, I don't think I would do it now.

April 15, 2010 at 9:15 AM  
Blogger Caroline said...

Yikes! Agree with Kristin. It is amazing the evil out there. Crazy but I didn't expect this story to go there, so was surprised when it did. Nice job! Thanks for sharing! I will not be picking up strangers today. :o)

April 15, 2010 at 9:36 AM  
Blogger MB Moellenhoff said...

I am glad you enjoyed it. I wrote this as part of a writing exercise and really liked it. We were just given the word "stranger" and were supposed to write for 10 minutes.I sometimes do better with those than when I really think about what I am writing.

April 15, 2010 at 6:50 PM  
Blogger Madabip said...

Well thank God I read all the comments. I thought you were reliving a horrid experience and am glad to know it was just an exercise. Nice dialogue Mary.

April 26, 2010 at 1:17 AM  
Blogger MB Moellenhoff said...

lol! No... just Fiction.

I have taken a liking to the format. That exercise in particular was fun. I also liked the idea of trying to set the scene and the underlying emotion using only dialog. We had to do something similar in my writing class. I am not sure I still have that one.

April 26, 2010 at 8:46 AM  

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